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HENRY'S COMMENTS IN BOLD AND UNDERLINED.**//__


 * //__/no/no__//** Hello Henry on the December 9,2009 we are having a science fair at St. Joseph .Some of us are going to have partner but I am going to my partners house we are going to work together but are names are Derek,Matthew and Tre.
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We are doing a Balloon Rocket because it is cool cause we get to lonch it ona string and go 'WOOSH' in the sky and thats my favorit part about the science.What if it went straight up in the sky and started to go in'CIRCLES andZIGZAGS' that would be cool.
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But my mom were thinking about what we were going to do. But now I know what I am going to do a good project she said that we were going to over Christmas breack.
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first we have to read the instruction before we do anything.But last year it was the worst year the teacher is Mrs.Lockheart but know it is Mrs.Bombick. for know she will teach us all we need to know in the things to help us for the science fair.But to make it work we have to us this steps this are the the tools we need to us we have a staw,balloon,string and a balloon. **//__ Work on the differences between know __//** **//__w etc.__//** Some of are parents are helping us for the science fair project.There doing some of the project for and about the project I always win doing it mines went far there then theres.Then we wrote a paper about the things what we did and what happen on the science. __//**Differences between there/their etc. Make this paragraph longer--add sentences**//__ That we get to blow them up and they go shooting on a string realy fast. So it is going to be a blast but I hope you can come it will be fun but i will be doing my project over the week. __//** Good, but try to incorporate your introduction back into this conclusion.

Good job, I can't wait to here more about your project! **//__